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"She said "I'm fine, I'm o.k., cover up your trembling hands"- Fall Down- Toad the Wet Sprocket

"You don't have to sell your body to the night." Roxanne- The Police

Professor,

Such a riddle, little girl lost. So many men have known her, so few know her. We know her, don't we Professor.

Your poems have crossed a line professor. It's shitty imitation Charlie Baudelaire, Professor. Not even in French, French classes up everything doesn't it Professor. (Imagine that, a literate pimp).

You trouble her sleep, Professor. I ease such nightmares. Did she give or sell these panties to you, or did you steal them. She shouldn't have done that, if the former, that's exactly the kind of thing nutcases like you obsess over. Besides, I held them to my face, nothing unique, just like any other woman.

This is your only warning, Professor.

The Pimp

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M. Forspennend

You have helped her in this life. But I am going to escort her into a new one, one where your brutal services will no longer be needed. It's all cutting meat, but you are a butcher and I am a surgeon. I left this letter for you at your mother's house. I trust it finds you well and happy.

I also trust you know this is your sole warning.

Professor G.S

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Professor,

Men like you are her business. She takes her pleasure with women in her personal life. I have been with her, of course, but in order to insure a dogs loyalty you have to feed it. But you don't feed it too frequently or it gets fat and unwilling. I am very willing. The more we correspond, Professor the more convinced I am, that you are her death, and I am yours.

The story is writ by who finds who first. I think the time has come for us to meet. I will bring my black driving gloves and have something for you in my pocket. No, not a firearm, nothing so crude as that. You speak of butchers and surgeons perhaps we will see who's education proves more relevant.

The Pimp
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Detective Oliveira...Amy,

It is awful that you had to shoot both those horrible men. It was surpassing genius how you framed the scene.

Come see me tomorrow night. Your bravery should be rewarded, I know just where to start.

All my love,
Roxanne

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swirlsofpurple

I love the format of this and the voices you've given these characters, it packs a lot into a few words, and absolutely loved that ending.

fausts_dream

Thanks, I was.mostly happy with it.

tonithegreat

Totally here for your ending! The start just mysterious and jarring enough to pull me in. Good stuff.

adoptedwriter

Thank you!

Awesomeness.

Thanks so much

reidharriscooper

I get an almost Batwoman and The Question feel from this. Which is cool. I musy admit I don't see the prompt to the work, but we don't HAVE to... the writer knows that and as long as they present something cool, I'm here for it.

Tenuous match with the promo, I was going with Roxanne as having been in danger of being left behind. Everyone was trying to "save" her for their own ends and she decided to save herself.

If DW allowed likes instead of comments. I don't have anything to add but appreciation/

mollywheezy

So much intensity in so few words! Great job!

nicholewithanh

Interesting piece — I’m glad with how it ended!

Thanks, I am glad people seem to like the ending.

roina_arwen

This has sort of a steampunk feel to it. Great ending.

Thanks for the praise, I like steampunk.

muchtooarrogant

What a fun twist. Good job, detective.

Dan

thephantomq

Good riddance to those two dudes. I hope Roxanne and Amy have a good life together, lol.

One can hope! Thanks

chasing_silver

Fully, your writing has this intensity to it that I've always loved. This is no exception. Another stunner of a piece <3

Thank you, Elizabeth. It came together quickly. Sometimes entries almost write themselves.

halfshellvenus

I almost thought this might be heading in a "My Fair Lady" type of direction at first (the opening felt like an older era), but things got much darker very fast.

I like the manipulative feeling we get from the last letter, as if the detective is another pawn in Roxanne's life. Will her story end badly too?

I mean I left it ambiguous, but she would need new representation, an attack dog.

n3m3sis43

I liked that aspect of the ending as well. It really felt to me like the detective might also be a pawn but it’s hard to say. I’d love to believe Roxanne is capable of love with the right people.

I thought of her as a victim who turned tables, not immoral but a little amoral like a cat.

Awesome, that’s how she read to me.

murielle

Wow! Did not expect it. Any of it. Especially the end.

Bravo!

Well last season I did a number on "Take on me" it was "Roxanne"'s turn.

sohardtohold

The ending was a surprise, for sure. I don't know how you come up with your ideas, but this one is great.

Thanks, who knows, some of my brain cells aren't dead, just irreversibly warped
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bleodswean

Nice to see a successful writing experiment! That ending! OOF!

Thank you! Glad it worked for you.

inkstainedfingertips

Your voices are distinct and unique. Intriguing and mysterious with a nice twist at the end. In the beginning, I almost got a Jack the Ripper vibe and it immediately drew me in. Really well done.